Today in class we had a critique for the second project, the "life of" comic. We split the class in half so that it was easier to see the comics and easier to give feedback. Here is the feedback I received:
- The five o'clock shadow was effective for showing that the character aged.
- People like the drawing style and the unique layout. They thought it helped the comic stand out and make more of an impact.
- They like the neighborhood layout
- Jerry enjoyed the moment to moment transition with the house burning down.
- Jerry also thought that the smoke breaking the gutter was a good because it added more action and moved the eye around the page.
- People thought that the houses blended together for the last tow rows. They suggested changing the colors a bit so they stood apart.
- People questioned the old man saying "welcome home gang" at the end, but I still stand behind him saying that, as I've defended in an earlier post.
- Professor Panifino thought that the type face I choose for the title and dates was a bit too strong and distracted from the comic. He suggested changing it from black to a dark yellow.
- People questioned using the triangles to balance out the page. Some alternate suggestions where a border, a larger typeface, and some small drawings closer to the page border.
- Panifino thought that the title and dates flowed together, and I agree. I spent a lot of time trying to find the right spot for the title, but I think that I moved it a little too close to the dates.
- People also suggested that the smoke could be yellow. They felt that it was to dominate being white, and that a yellow would help it stand out less.
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