Zachary Shaffer DESN 225 (Comics): Week 11 out of class

This week out of class I had to choose a section of my narrative and write a script for it. I decided to do the section where Arnold is first waking up and meets John Turner. I thought this would be a good section to just jump into since it's a transition and you don’t really need to know what happens before it. Also I thought it would be fun to play with the tension of him being tied up in the chair.

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PANEL 1: ECU tight shot on arnold's eyes as they are partially opening as he wakes up. HE is very groggy and his eyes won’t be focused.

Arnold: UGGHH,

PANEL 2: ECU thin panel about half the size of panel 1. Arnold’s eyes glance up and to the left

PANEL 3 ECU Same size as panel 2. Arnolds eyes glance quickly over to the right.

Arnold: Where am I?

PANEL 4: Worm’s eye View of the ceiling. The ceiling is made up of numerous dirty and awfully stained ceiling tiles that look like they’ve been neglected for years. Some of the tiles are completely missing and loose wires dangle from the openings. A couple of dark pipes with chipped paint come down through.

Arnold: These disgusting ceiling tiles aren’t the lovely eggshell plaster ceiling that I’m used to seeing in the morning...

Panel 5: ECU very tight shot on a digital watch face where only the watch face is visible. The time shown is 11:15 PM. The watch is well used, but loved. Slightly scuffed up and has one or two scratches on the screen.

Arnold: ... Cripes, It's not the morning. It isn’t even past midnight!

PANEL 6: Establishing shot of INT. Arnold is sat tied to an old wooden chair positioned on the right third of the panel. The chair is of medium size, not too fancy, and the kind that would be for a dinner table. The room is an old office that has been abandoned for a long time and is illuminated by a lamp on the floor in front of Arnold. This cause a long shadow to be cast on the floor and the wall behind Arnold. Several other trash esq items are on the floor casting shadows. The room an average ceiling height for an office and several chairs and desks are stacked on the left hand wall in the FG. Arnold is wearing a two piece PJ suit with a repeating pattern of leaping sheep. The top buttons down with long sleeves, and the bottoms are just a little too short for him.

Arnold: Clearly something is wrong here (Staring directly out at the viewer)

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PANEL 1 Worm’s eye POV of Arnold from the waist up. Arnold is trying the glance behind him as a loud creak is coming from that direction. Arnold isn’t panicking he’s calling out in a loud and clear voice. The dirty ceiling tiles are slightly visible above his head but not enough to be distracting. The area behind Arnold is cast in strong shadow.

Arnold: Hello? Who’s there?

spx : creeeeeaaaak

PANEL 2 FS of an open doorway. Standing in the door is a man wearing grey trousers and an oversized flannel shirt. The man is cut in half in about a 30 degree angle sloping up to the right by a strong shadow from the doorway so that only below his waist is visible in the light. Everything else is silhouetted.

John: Hello there Arnold, Who I am doesn’t matter to you right now...

Arnold : Got it!

John: um excuse me?

PANEL 3 Shoulder up shot of arnold’s head. He’s looking very smug with his eyes closed and a slight smile on his face as he talks. BG is solid black to focus on Arnold and his face.

Arnold: You’re John Turner who had ten hostages held up in the quickie clean laundromat on the corner of Nuebry and State Street eight years ago ...

PANEL 4 This a long panel with Arnold positioned on the left hand side. He’s still making the same face as he continues to talk.

Arnold: I remember it was a clear sunny day except for a few clouds off to the west. I think you were arrested and given about 7 years time. That must mean this is your terrible revenge upon me. Let’s see hmmm, That’s right you have a mother named Mary-ann who’s all alone in Manhattan. Who’s birthday is on june 14th. Would you look at that it’s June 14th today what a funny coincidence John ...

John : (from off panel and so that his bubble overlaps the end of Arnold’s cutting him off) Crap!

PANEL 5 American Shot of John and Arnold in the room. John is on the left while arnold is on the right. John is smacking himself on the forehead he doesn’t notice that his knife falls out of his pocket. Arnold is looking up at him concerned.

John: I can’t believe I forgot that Mom’s birthday was today. Geez she’s gonna be so heartbroken that I abandoned her.

Arnold: Well if you left now you could probably get a small present and make it to her apartment before midnight.

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PANEL 1 Eye level shot of John running out of the door, he’s already mostly through the door so only his legs are visible. He calling out over his shoulder back towards arnold so the speech bubble will being coming out of the doorway.

John: You’re right! Thanks Arnold, now stay right there for a bit.

Panel 2 shot of Arnold from Mid chest up looking smugly off to the left (the panel where john left the room) Dark BG not to distract from face.

Arnold: Ha! The fool left his knife on the floor getting out of here will be supremely easy.

PANEL 3 Large wide panel, Worms eye view of the knife laying in a small puddle. The knife is in the foreground and Arnold is in the BG and distorted by forced perspective he has a horrified look upon his face. The room is also showing extremes of perspective.

Spx: gasp!

PANEL 4 CU of Arnold's face, he looks incredibly stressed out, far more than he should be for the knife just being in a puddle. Maybe some sweat is rolling down the side of his face.

Arnold: Standing water! I can’t possible get the knife from there. Drinking or coming in contact with standing water is an extremely easy way to catch all sorts of diseases.

PANEL 5 FS of Arnold in his chair. His face is screwed up tight and he is clearly thinking incredible hard. Maybe some action lines are coming in from the edged of the panel to make it more dramatic.

Arnold: Thinking!

Also out of class this week I worked on developing characters and scenes for the comic.

Arnold:

Arnold is a middle aged man who is slightly balding and a little gangly. I decided to make him tall so that he’d look weird tied up in the chair. This will really emphasis how out of place he is. Also he is in his PJ's to again make him look out of place.

John Turner

John Turner is a large stout man. Although the comic is modern I decided to give him the look of an old fashioned gangster. This will hopefully help make people see him as a bad guy even though I don’t give him much back story

Jane Rogers

Average middle aged white woman. Blond hair with a bit of a funky cut so that she’ll stand out. She’s wearing a sweater because I love to make people wear sweaters. Also it hides her body desexualizing her a bit. I thought that her and Arnold need a relationship built on helping each other emotionally.